Formal Writing
In this topic we will be looking at different examples of formal writing; guarantees, written complaints, emails and the contrast between 'Plain English' and Gobbledegook.
We looked at an instruction manual and read through the terms and conditions for the product's guarantee. We tried to work out some of the complex language that had been used.
CHALLENGE ACTIVITY:
We came across the phrase "This does not affect your statutory rights" in the terms and conditions we read in class. What does this mean? Come to Miss Coles and explain this term to recieve 2 merits!
We came across the phrase "This does not affect your statutory rights" in the terms and conditions we read in class. What does this mean? Come to Miss Coles and explain this term to recieve 2 merits!
We looked through some examples of formal and informal writing; here are are our findings:
Letters of Complaint
We have been looking at letters of complaint; why we write them, what makes a good one and what need to go into a really good one. Together we wrote the letter below to Mr Cook, complainign about the stairs in the PPS building.
Dear Mr Cook,
We are writing to complain about the enormous number of stairs that can be found within the school premises and urge you to consider installing an elevator in the PPS building.
The current stairs in the PPS building take up too much of our energy and we are finding we are too exhausted to concentrate in the lessons ahead of us. Just yesterday Hattie Burnay fell asleep during Miss Coles’ English lesson yesterday as she had taken several trips on the stairs throughout the day.
The main stairs are a health hazard; because the carpets are too slippery, several children have been spotted falling down the stairs on the way to attend their important lessons.
We strongly suggest you install an elevator in the main building; as it will not only make it quicker for staff and students to reach their lessons without being late but also will help keep up the energy levels of staff and students, therefore preventing potential falling asleep in lesson disasters. The elevator will also help those who, on a daily basis carry musical instruments and large items up the stairs.
We understand this may not be of use to you; but it will be of great use to all staff and students on the upper floors. We feel extremely strongly about this and if you do not consider our suggestions we may have to take this to a higher body.
Yours sincerely,
Year 6 Blue
We are writing to complain about the enormous number of stairs that can be found within the school premises and urge you to consider installing an elevator in the PPS building.
The current stairs in the PPS building take up too much of our energy and we are finding we are too exhausted to concentrate in the lessons ahead of us. Just yesterday Hattie Burnay fell asleep during Miss Coles’ English lesson yesterday as she had taken several trips on the stairs throughout the day.
The main stairs are a health hazard; because the carpets are too slippery, several children have been spotted falling down the stairs on the way to attend their important lessons.
We strongly suggest you install an elevator in the main building; as it will not only make it quicker for staff and students to reach their lessons without being late but also will help keep up the energy levels of staff and students, therefore preventing potential falling asleep in lesson disasters. The elevator will also help those who, on a daily basis carry musical instruments and large items up the stairs.
We understand this may not be of use to you; but it will be of great use to all staff and students on the upper floors. We feel extremely strongly about this and if you do not consider our suggestions we may have to take this to a higher body.
Yours sincerely,
Year 6 Blue